tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2163335545321680832.post2847598634821848775..comments2013-06-11T04:47:40.143+09:00Comments on Intermediate Writing Spring 2013: Park Gyu Oh/Chu-Seok (Korean thanks-giving day)/9:00 am profjbhhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06809066317885065503noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2163335545321680832.post-37730151032294511872013-03-24T20:51:16.281+09:002013-03-24T20:51:16.281+09:00To Park gyu-oh from Ahn sang wook
1. The topic of ...To Park gyu-oh from Ahn sang wook<br />1. The topic of your writing is Chu-seok, the national holiday of Korea.<br />2. The most interesting part for me is that you mentioned history which informed us of the origin of the holiday, Chu-seok. Even though I’m Korean, this is first time for me to hear about that. In my opinion, by presenting the history in the introduction, you can let readers read with curiosity and interesting.<br />3. You specifically described the foods, writing how they look like, how to cook. Therefore, I think it is very easy for foreigners to understand about the traditional Korean holiday.<br />4. Especially, you specifically provided what you are going to talk about following paragraphs in regular sequence. This is good! <br />Overall, legibility of your writing is good! Thank you.<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11050349310530638452noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2163335545321680832.post-1036171425202213352013-03-24T20:07:05.207+09:002013-03-24T20:07:05.207+09:00To Gyu Oh Park From Jieun Choi
1. What I like abo...To Gyu Oh Park From Jieun Choi<br /><br />1. What I like about this piece of writing is that you introduced various and specific examples related to Chuseok. I realized how many traditional activities were enjoyed in Chuseok, and all those foods you said are my favorites ;)<br /><br />2. Your main topic seems to be Chuseok, Korean version of Thanksgiving Day.<br /><br />3. Your first paragraph gave me an impression because you introduced the origin of Chuseok by going far back to Sinra Dynasty.<br /><br />4. "We do not dance and if you are Christian, skip the rite." This sentence seems like you are suggesting us to skip the rite if we are Christian.<br /><br />5. Your writing would be much better if there's no fragments like "Kim-chi, pumpkins, pepper, sea foods, and etc".<br /><br />Jieun Choihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00755205857249617091noreply@blogger.com