First, in Village School taken by Margaret Bourke-White, characters and background of this photo make us feel dark and make the stifling atmosphere. Children are all seated in class and staring the camera. They just look at forward with no smile and with no facial expression. And they are in dark classroom.
Second, the photo of Children's Puppet Theatre taken by Alfred Eisenstadt, it has quite different atmosphere with Village School. Unlike the former, children in the photo have various facial expressions. Some children are smiling and some seem to scream. So, this bright and happy look makes the atmosphere much brighter and lively and vibrant.
Most of all, the main factor that makes the difference between this two photos is the focus of the camera.
In the first photo, the camera focused on their faces, their expressionless face. This focus emphasizes children's face and it makes the atmosphere much darker.
However, in Children's Puppet, the background is bright. So, we can feel cheerful atmosphere in this photo.
Taking a photograph is kind of big habit loved by many people in the world. We share our happiness and sad with our photos. And when we look it again, we can feel how our feeling was and it also affects our current feelings. Taking a good photograph means this. When the photo can make us feel sad or happy with the photo, it can be the great and impressive one to people. And it is memorable.
From Simmy
ReplyDelete1.Yes, the introduction includes an interesting hook: When we look at our old photo, we can know how my feeling was from my facial expression in photo.
2.The introduction includes the titles of the photographs but doesn't mention the names of the photographers.
3.The writer used terms like main center of interest, contrast and mood.
4.Yes, the writer analyzes the message of each paragraph.
5.Pragraph 4 only explains the differences between the photographs.
6.I can't find any similes.
7.Yes, the conclusion evaluates the effects of the photographs:When the photo can make us feel sad or happy, it can be the great and impressive on to people. And it is memorable.
I think you have nice introduction and conclusion paragraphs, but it would be much better if you add some specefic detail or experience for your hook:"When we look at our old photo, we can know how my feeling was from my facial expression in photo." Maybe you can talk about one of your old photos, so it can be more effective to make readers get interested in your essay.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I see that you are mainly focusing on discussing differences between two photos, but in the third body paragraph, you can also include some similarities as well.