‘Damn! I’m really hacked off!’ Every time we take a subway, we are always faced with people whose facial emotion says just like this! This means that they are not satisfied with their life, and feel that they are unhappy. Definitions of happiness are variety, but the most important thing to be happy person is to feel contentment about your present-day life. Even though most people always struggle on being happy, they really don’t know how they can have fulfillment to their life, exactly. If a person wants to find happiness, just keep the three things. We don’t compare our life and others, and must not hesitate to accept risks. Furthermore most important thing is that we always have to be thankful for a hectic and mundane life.
If we want to be contentment to our life, we must not compare out situation and that of others. Many people aren’t fulfillment to their life because they always make a comparison. But anyone who is the best in all fields can’t exist. Everybody knows William H. Gates who is one of the most successful businessmen in the world, including Lee GunHee. If Lee GunHee compares his ability and that of William H. Gates, there isn’t Samsung of today. So comparing to others is useless and just gives us dissatisfaction. We just focus our conditions, and think about our situation only.
Finally, the most significant thing is that we have to have gratitude in our life. To be satisfaction in our daily life, we have boundless gratitude in everyday life. People are sick of their lives and say “same old run-of-the-mill stuff day after day” peevishly. But on condition that we die by tomorrow, today’s our daily life is useless and tedious? The answer is “No”. So we always live as if we pass away tomorrow. We just have to appreciate that the fact that we can eat rice, and we can attend this class that really want to take, etc.
So I recommend you three tips to exist happily, for now. First, we must not make a comparison our ability and that of others. Besides, we don’t be afraid of taking risks. Furthermore, we have gratitude in our living. These three means are all priceless information, but the most important thing that we always have to keep in mind is to appreciate the everyday life. If people follow these things, there is no doubt that everybody will be happier than now. If you want to be a happy, why don’t you try this, right now? I really recommend it!
Well done. Correct me if I am wrong, if a person wants to find happiness, there are three points : No comparison with others, accept risks and always be thankful. Three causes and three effects. Structure well organized too. Just few notes :
ReplyDeleteBut anyone who is the best in all fields can’t exist : No one can be good in all fields / A person who is good in all fields does not exists.
I would really put what you wrote here into practice. Thanks for sharing.
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ReplyDeleteI wrote this comment based on questions at page 75.
ReplyDelete1. The introduction of your essay include a general theis about happiness: the most important thing to be happy person is to feel contentment about your present-day life.
2. The cause presented in the first body paragraph is not comparing our life to others'. The second paragraph says that we should not be afraid of taking some risks. And in the third paragraph, it says that we must feel grateful for our life.
3. All three causes seem to be logically explained, which are closely linked to the main point of your essay.
4. Not many, and there are some connectors such as "because, furthermore, moreover".
5. Yes, the casues are well paraphrased in the conclusion: So I recommend you three tips to exist happily, for now. First, we must not make a comparison our ability and that of others. Besides, we don’t be afraid of taking risks. Furthermore, we have gratitude in our living.
6. I think you have concluded your essay with an advice: If people follow these things, there is no doubt that everybody will be happier than now. If you want to be a happy, why don’t you try this, right now? I really recommend it!
‘Damn! I’m really hacked off!’ Every time we take a subway, we are always faced with people whose facial emotion says just like this! This means that they are not satisfied with their life, and feel that they are unhappy. Definitions of happiness are variety, but the most important thing to be happy person is to feel contentment about your present-day life. Even though most people always struggle on being happy, they really don’t know how they can have fulfillment to their life, exactly. If a person wants to find happiness, just keep the three things. We don’t compare our life and others, and must not hesitate to accept risks. Furthermore most important thing is that we always have to be thankful for a hectic and mundane life.
ReplyDeleteIf we want to be contentment to our life, we must not compare out situation and that of others. Many people aren’t fulfillment to their life because they always make a comparison. But No one can be good in all fields Everybody knows William H. Gates who is one of the most successful businessmen in the world, including Lee GunHee. If Lee GunHee compares his ability and that of William H. Gates, there isn’t Samsung of today. So comparing to others is useless and just gives us dissatisfaction. We just focus our conditions, and think about our situation only.
Second, we aren’t afraid of taking risks. Everybody avoids challenging problems, because most people want to live without any matter. Furthermore people put off doing settlements until the very last minute. Moreover every thinks that to escape challenges is better for them than to throw down the gauntlet. But if we always are not faced with the bad situation, we can’t move ahead and we just stand at the same space. So we must deal with the problems that are encountered in daily life.
Finally, the most significant thing is that we have to have gratitude in our life. To be satisfaction in our daily life, we have boundless gratitude in everyday life. People are sick of their lives and say “same old run-of-the-mill stuff day after day” peevishly. But on condition that we die by tomorrow, today’s our daily life is useless and tedious? The answer is 'No'. So we always live as if we pass away tomorrow. We just have to appreciate that the fact that we can eat rice, and we can attend this class that really want to take, etc.
So I recommend you three tips to exist happily, for now. First, we must not make a comparison our ability and that of others. Besides, we don’t be afraid of taking risks. Furthermore, we have gratitude in our living. These three means are all priceless information, but the most important thing that we always have to keep in mind is to appreciate the everyday life. If people follow these things, there is no doubt that everybody will be happier than now. If you want to be a happy, why don’t you try this, right now? I really recommend it!