The causes of my happiness.
One research found people who feel more happiness tend to easily achieve their goals and to have a long life than others who don't. Happiness affects directly from our thinkings to success of our lives. So, It is one of the essential factor to live beautiful life. Therefore, what we should know is to find out when we feel happiness and what the primary causes are to pursue our happiness. when do we feel happy?
First factor of happiness is the sense of accomplishment. It usually goes for our jobs or in school whatever we do for our life. For example, people feel really great when they complete their job succesfully. And this achievement affects to the feeling of self-satisfaction and also positive thinking. As a result of these positive effects, they gain confidence and this can make another achievement in their lives. The start with the sence of achievement and the end with happiness.
Second, having some interesting habits makes us happy. We can take a break from our routine and get rid of stress. For example, my father love to go fishing. One day, he said go to fishing makes him feel much happier. Therefore, Enjoying whatever we like is one of the important factor of happiness. People who are more relaxed are much happier.
In my opinion, the most essential and important factor of happiness is our health.
We can do everything we want when we are healthy. It includes physical and also mental health. It is an undeniable fact. For example, studying hard, fulfill the goals and traveling with friends.. The strong prerequisite to do these all is to be in good health.
An article said when we see a picture of people with big smile, we feel much happiness than before we see it. Happiness is so infectious. In other words, when you want to feel happy, keep smiling to friends or family. I'm sure it can be also a great factor of our happiness.
I miswrote my class time.. I'm in 9am class. Sorry for confusing.@-@
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of essay is the hook is interesting. When I started reading this essay, the first sentence imediately caught my attention and made me want to read the rest of the essay.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to be that people should find out when they feel happiness and what the primary causes are to pursue their happiness.
3. These particular words or lines stuck me as powerful:
An article said when we see a picture of people with big smile, we feel much happiness than before we see it.
I think this sentence gave me a impression. However, I think your last paragraph should be a little bit longer to wrap up your words.
4. Your structure of essay is well organized and also, I liked it becuase you used your own experience to explain your thoughts. One thing that will make your writing better is that you should use more detail explanations to help readers understand.
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ReplyDeleteThe causes of my happiness.
One research found people who feel more happiness tend to easily achieve their goals and to have a long life than others who don't. Happiness affects directly from our thinkings to success of our lives. So, It is one of the essential factor to live beautiful life. Therefore, what we should know is to find out when we feel happiness and what the primary causes are to pursue our happiness. when do we feel happy?
First factor of happiness is the sense of accomplishment. It usually goes for our jobs or in school whatever we do for our life. For example, people feel really great when they complete their job successfully. And this achievement affects to the feeling of self-satisfaction and also positive thinking which means self-confidence. As a result, self-confidence makes us much stronger person so, It could be the motive of another achievement in our lives.
The start with the sence of achievement and the end with happiness.
Second, having some interesting habits makes us happy. By doing our own habits, we can take a break from our routine in order to get rid of stress. Reducing stress is one of the essential factor of happiness and our habits are very helpful to reduce it. For example, my father love to go fishing. One day, he said go to fishing makes him feel much happier. In addition, doing habits are helpful not only to reduce our stress but also to promote mental fitness. Therefore, Enjoying whatever we like is one of the important factor of happiness. We need to remember 'People who are more relaxed are much happier'.
In my opinion, the most essential and important factor of happiness is to be in good health.
We can do everything we want when we are healthy. It includes physical and also mental health. It is an undeniable fact. For example, studying hard, fulfill the goals and traveling with friends.. The strong prerequisite to do these all is to be in good health.
An article said when we see a picture of people with big smile, we feel much happiness than before we see it. This study means that happiness is so infectious emotion. Therefore, when you want to feel happy, keep smiling to friends or family. This smile will return to you.
Why don't we keep smiling? I'm sure it can be also a great factor of our happiness.
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