Saturday, April 6, 2013

Hyein Shim/ happiness/ tue 9am

A lot of people argue that money is not an important and crucial part of happiness. They say they could be happy without money. In their lives, the things like enjoyment, satisfaction, or accomplishment are the key points of happiness, not money. But are people can really happy without having money?

 

First, think about the enjoyment. Many people will say that if they enjoy their life, their life could be full of happiness even though they don't have enough money. Yes, it seems right. But is enjoyment could be possible without spending money? Assuming that here is a person who enjoys watching TV very much and finds happiness from this. Watching TV means you have to had TV, money for electric charges, also cable rates. It is all about money problem. Then think about a person who finds happiness while talking with friends. It seems like there's no money to spend, but it also has. They need a place to have a conversation. Chairs, small tables, or cups of coffee will needed. Therefore, enjoying a life without money is a ridiculous statement.

 

Second, think about the satisfaction. Many people say that just be satisfied what you already had will lead to the happiness. It can be true. But are people can really be satisfied if there is no money to eat even a breakfast? Is this a real satisfaction? A statement "satisfy with what you already had" is just for a person who already had enough to live well. It is not for a person who doesn't have money to eat a breakfast. So the feeling of satisfaction is also with money problems.

 

Last is about the accomplishment. Some people feel happiness when they achieve their goal. For example, if a person who wants to be a good teacher, he or she needs to study hard. At this point, the money problem arises. To study, textbooks, notebooks, pens, and money for the exam are necessary. If this person doesn't have enough money, he or she cannot achieve the dream.

 

In a capitalistic society, money is the most powerful thing. Without money, there's nothing to do really. Although money is so powerful weapon, don't' let the money to rule your life, you rule the money. If you can manage your money efficiently, your life will be much happier than now.

2 comments:

  1. From Seonyoung Hwang to Hyein Shim

    1. What I like about your writing is that you confronted streotype that 'money cannot guarantee you being happy.' It was interesting to read.

    2. Your main point seems to be that money has to be considered when going toward for happiness.

    3. I personally enjoyed your conclusion that 'In a capitalistic society, money is the most powerful thing.' because it is true even though it is sad to admit.

    4. I'm quite not sure your second body paragraph about happiness and satisfaction. Satisfaction can be vary and I'd be glad to know more what 'satisfaction' you referred to.

    5. Your writing overall is well written and has interesting support ideas. However, considering this writing is aimed for cause & effect, it'd be much better to clearly show the relations between sentences by using conjunctions such as because, therefore, thus and so on.

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  2. A lot of people argue that money is not an important and crucial part of happiness. They say they could be happy without money. In their lives, the things like enjoyment, satisfaction, or accomplishment are the key points of happiness, not money. But are people can really happy without having money?

    First, think about the enjoyment. Many people will say that if they enjoy their life, their life could be full of happiness even though they don't have enough money. Yes, it seems right. But is enjoyment could be possible without spending money? Assuming that here is a person who enjoys watching TV very much and finds happiness from this. Watching TV means you have to had TV, money for electric charges, also cable rates. It is all about money problem. Then think about a person who finds happiness while talking with friends. It seems like there's no money to spend, but it also has. They need a place to have a conversation. Chairs, small tables, or cups of coffee will needed. Therefore, enjoying a life without money is a ridiculous statement.

    Second, think about the satisfaction. Many people say that just be satisfied what you already had will lead to the happiness. In my case, I feel satisfy when I achieve the goal I set. I feel really happy and feel excitement with proud of myself. But are people can really be satisfied if there is no money to eat even a breakfast? Is this a real satisfaction? A statement "satisfy with what you already had" is just for a person who already had enough to live well. It is not for a person who doesn't have money to eat a breakfast. So the feeling of satisfaction is also with money problems.

    Last is about the accomplishment. Some people feel happiness when they achieve their goal. For example, if a person who wants to be a good teacher, he or she needs to study hard. At this point, the money problem arises. To study, textbooks, notebooks, pens, and money for the exam are necessary. If this person doesn't have enough money, he or she cannot achieve the dream.

    In a capitalistic society, money is the most powerful thing. Without money, there's nothing to do really. Although money is so powerful weapon, don't' let the money to rule your life, you rule the money. If you can manage your money efficiently, your life will be much happier than now.

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