Happiness, it is not difficult
People want to be happy. So they read books about happiness, hear the lecture or have a religion. Despite these efforts, they don't feel happy with their live and even they say they are unfortunate. How can we be happy? There are many ways to be happy but, I think, everyone can be happy with these three things: job, family and friends and hobbies
First, all people need the job. When we achieve good results in the workplace or get good grades in school as a result of our hard work, we feel a sense of accomplishment. This feeling is very important because it is a motive power of our life. Lives are full of failures, ordeal and obstacles. So sometimes we become frustrated and we want to quit everything. Nevertheless, we keep trying to attain the goal. Through this process, we feel the meaning of life and come to maturity.
When we return home from work, we are so tired physically and emotionally. So we want to take a rest. At a time like this, mom's warm soups, kids' smile or a puppy running to greet us are the greatest strengths. So we feel safe and comfortable and we can recharge for tomorrow. And also friends are important as well as our family. With them, we spend hours chatting and pour out all the troubles. Whereby we relieve the stress and we can be understood.
It is also good to have a hobby to do in the leisure time. It can be anything you like. For example, I know a woman that watches the stars in the sky through a telescope and shares it with people. Each time I meet her, she always looks energetic because this hobby acts as a buffer against stress. Consequently, it makes the daily routine bearable.
I like your reading and agree with your points;
ReplyDeletethat having a job, family or friends, and hobbies make us happy. Also you have clear thesis statement, topic sentences on each body paragraphs and good supporting details.
And you used cause and effect connectors, such as 'because' or 'consequently'.. which is really good!.
But it would be much better if you add some more ideas or summary on your conclusion paragraph.
1. What I like in this piece of writing is the 4th paragraph which explains the importance of having hobbies because it relieves our stress.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems that we can find happiness while achieving goals, being with family and friends and enjoying hobbies.
3. These particular words or lines stuck me as powerful:
At a time like this, mom's warm soups, kids' smile or a puppy running to greet us are the greatest strengths. I totally agree with the idea that these things are making us happy in our daily lives.
4. I think there should be more sentences in the conclusion part. Summarizing can be included.
1. I like your writing. It is generally interesting.
ReplyDelete2. your main point seems that everyone can be happy with these three things: job, family and friends and hobbies.
3. I think it was very helpful to give a specific example.
4. i think your essay has a good structure.
Happiness, it is not difficult
ReplyDeletePeople want to be happy. So they read books about happiness, hear the lecture or have a religion. Despite these efforts, they don't feel happy with their live and even they say they are unfortunate. How can we be happy? There are many ways to be happy but, I think, everyone can be happy with these three things: job, family and friends and hobbies
First, all people need the job. When we achieve good results in the workplace or get good grades in school as a result of our hard work, we feel a sense of accomplishment. This feeling is very important because it is a motive power of our life. Lives are full of failures, ordeal and obstacles. So sometimes we become frustrated and we want to quit everything. Nevertheless, we keep trying to attain the goal. Through this process, we feel the meaning of life and come to maturity.
When we return home from work, we are so tired physically and emotionally. So we want to take a rest. At a time like this, mom's warm soups, kids' smile or a puppy running to greet us are the greatest strengths. So we feel safe and comfortable and we can recharge for tomorrow. And also friends are important as well as our family. With them, we spend hours chatting and pour out all the troubles. Whereby we relieve the stress and we can be understood.
It is also good to have a hobby to do in the leisure time. It can be anything you like. For example, I know a woman that watches the stars in the sky through a telescope and shares it with people. Each time I meet her, she always looks energetic because this hobby acts as a buffer against stress. Consequently, it makes the daily routine bearable.
These three things are not hard to seek and inexpensive. Happiness is in the daily life and eveyone can discover it. So whenever you feel depressed or envy what others have and their success, remember this fact. I hope you are really happy.