Most of all the copyright prohibit people's thinking, in other words it make a boundary of creativity. The most important and strong point of the creativity is that it have freedom. You have free to think everything. But now copyright stops everything and our creative mind are going to be dead. This could be a big problem at the future that it didn't help developing human nature.
Also artist can make enough money without copyright. There are so many examples about this. The real fans are giving enough money. They will but CD and going to their concert and it is enough for making money for the artist. Also if you have ability of art than the money will follow you. So It is totally illgical for it do.
At last, creative idea can come out with out on the purpose of profit. For example, Zuckerberg did not make Facebook for money but only for the confiderence of the Havard student. But now it become so famous and makes lots of financial profit. Other things with great development are coming from accident or not important idea. So
So these reasons are why the copyright are not profitable. Artist can make enough money without copyrights and copyrights are only making prohibit people's creativity and idea ultimately human developing. So for all these reasons the movement for copyleft is explain enough and perhaps copyleft could be better than copyright.
to Sejong Lee from Sangwook Ahn
ReplyDelete1. The essay has five paragraphs and has a thesis statement. It is also supported by each body paragraph. The third paragraph does not contain a counter-argument with either a refutation or a concession, though.
2. Your main idea seems that you are totally agree with the abolish movement of copyright, citing that copyright have a possibility of undermining one’s creativity and ideas
3. I feel interested in your sentence: artist can make enough money without copyright. Because I’ve never been thought like that way, but after reading your essay, I become agreeable with your ideas.
4. I think your writing is good and simple to read. Because you presented very specific examples like the behind story of facebook, and copyleft. However, I found many grammatical errors that might look trivial… I think it should be good for you to review one more time before posting on the blog.
1. Does the essay have five paragraphs? Yes.
ReplyDelete2. Does the essay have a thesis statement that identifies the writer's point of view? Yes, it has.
3. Do the body paragraphs include topic sentences that support the writer's position? Yes.
4. Does the third body paragraph contain a counter-argument with either a refutation or a concession? No. This essay does not contain a counter-argument and refutation/concession.
5. Do the details in the body paragraphs support stated in the topic sentences? The second and the third body paragraphs support each topic sentence very clearly.
6. Does the conclusion restate the thesis in different words, make a prediction, or state the issue in a broader context? The writer restated the topic sentences.
7. Any suggestions? It has good readability. Adding counter-argument will justify your suggestion much better.
Copyright is the hottest potato in 21st century. It is what related to 'Can the artist can make enough money?' and the people agree with copy rights are agree with this point. But however there is movement naming 'copy left' which claims that all copy right should be banned. Although copyright looks that protecting artist's life, in fact it is killing them.
ReplyDeleteMost of all the copyright prohibit people's thinking, in other words it make a boundary of creativity. The most important and strong point of the creativity is that it have freedom. You have free to think everything. But now copyright stops everything and our creative mind are going to be dead. This could be a big problem at the future that it didn't help developing human nature.
Also Some artist argue that they cannot earn money without copyright. They say it is important for the profit. But different from their argument, artist can make enough money without copyright. There are so many examples about this. The real fans are giving enough money. They will but CD and going to their concert and it is enough for making money for the artist. Also if you have ability of art than the money will follow you. So It is totally illgical for it do.
At last, creative idea can come out with out on the purpose of profit. For example, Zuckerberg did not make Facebook for money but only for the confidence of the Havard student. But now it become so famous and makes lots of financial profit. Other things with great development are coming from accident or not important idea.
So these reasons are why the copyright are not profitable. Artist can make enough money without copyrights and copyrights are only making prohibit people's creativity and idea ultimately human developing. Copyright is different from what we see. So for all these reasons the movement for copyleft is explain enough and perhaps copyleft could be better than copyright for all of us's benefit.