Do you often share and download music off the Internet? Perhaps most of you do it regularly. However, it will cause the problems about copyright or intellectual property, so I don't think it's a rightful behavior.
First of all, downloading music for free violates the musician's intellectual property. The legal way is to go to the shop and buy their albums, but most of the people just download the music illegally. The behavior is like stealing, which is the same concept as stealing money from others. As stealing betrays the morality, we should restrict the behavior.
Secondly, artists don't get the payment that they deserve because of the free downloading. Artists make their efforts to create music, just as we put our energy into our daily work. Everyone asks the proper payment for the work, so do the artists. However, the more we download the music from the Internet for free, the less money the artists will get. This may discourage their willing to create the music. Isn't it a pity if there are less works of excellent music?
Many people hold different opinions regarding this issue. They think the Internet makes the music spread quickly in large range, which in some way makes the music famous. Although it makes sense, it doesn't mean that we can ignore the problem that I have mentioned above. Actually, if everyone goes to buy the album, the songs can also be well-known. What's more, through the TV or concert, people also get the chance to know the music.
In conclusion, downloading and sharing music off the Internet should be prevented, as it violates the intellectual property and do harm to the artists' income. So I suggest making laws to restrict this kind of behavior.
To simmy from Jieun
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that it was easy to understand your argument as you gave many illustrations compared to our life.
2. Your main point seems to be that downloading and sharing should be stopped.
3. I liked "Isn't it a pity if there are less works of excellent music?", as you asked to the readers and kind of told them that it will be public's loss at the end, which is very strong point.
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5. I think it would be better if you elaborated a little more about the making laws at the conclusion.
from ahn sang wook
ReplyDelete1. your eassay have followings:five paragraphs, a thesis statement that identifies the writer's point of view, each paragraph which contains the topic sentences, the third body paragraph with a concession. but the conclusion is quite similar with the thesis statement.
2. what i most like about your essay is that it is really easy to read and to understand. it is very clear.
3. the sentence 'As stealing betrays the morality' is the most impressive sentence.