Sunday, May 19, 2013

Parkyejee/ classification essay / 9a.m.

When I was eight years old, I began to learn English for the first time. It was interesting for me to learn from alphabet to a short word one by one. In addition, when I was a middle school student, I met an English teacher who was really passionate and was energetic. The way she taught English was really fascinating and attractive. I liked her and English alike which led me to study English hard and made me want to have a job which was related to English. Still now, I keep thinking which job I want to have and nowadays, I became interested in researching and developing a book to study foreign language. That is, I want to work in the field of publishing company. If so, among my abilities, which is helpful to work in that field? I think 3 abilities are important: Passion, patience, and communication skill.  

First, I think having passion is the most important. Because if we don't have any desire to do something, we would not feel any achievement and it is meaningless to work. Likewise, when working, I think the desire, that is having a passionate attitude is the most important ability.

 Second, being patient is also important. Even though we work what we like, sometimes we feel difficult or don't want to continue. I think we should overcome this step to be successful and with this attitude, we can grow our ability more and more.

 Finally, I mentioned communication skill because many workers need to collaborate to publish one book. So I thought listening to and respecting other's opinion is also necessary to do this work.

  I told my 3 abilities I have for my future career. Of course, these are needed based on my academic skill. So I will make ceaseless efforts to have my dream job and develop another abilities to make myself better.  

 

4 comments:

  1. to park yejee from Ahn sang-wook

    1. I think you want to work in the field of publishing company. and i think this dream originated from the experiences you had when you are young.

    2. I think the most impressive expression of your writing is this:So I will make ceaseless efforts. Because this simple sentence makes me feel powerful about your writing. especially, the word ceaseless is very good choice.

    3. However, if the three body paragraphs are a little bit longer than now, it would be better.

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  2. I am very impressed with your strong will into pursuing your dream job. Very well written. Good transitions and paragraphs organization. Some suggestions that would help improve :

    ~maybe you may want to add more ideas to your body paragraphs with more examples. It is a little short for body paragraphs.

    ~If so, among my abilities, which is helpful to work in that field? <<< remove the question mark

    ~I think the desire, that is having a passionate attitude is the most important ability. <<< rather than ability I think "quality" will help to make your sentences clearer.

    I love this sentence. Gave me very strong impression.
    "So I will make ceaseless efforts to have my dream job and develop another abilities to make myself better." (try changing 'abilities' to 'qualities')

    Its a pleasure reading.

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  3. From Yujin park to Yejee Park

    Your essay is well organized and has each point that you want to tell us in each paragraph.
    1. Does the introduction include backgrund information about the topic?
    -> yes, the story of your english teacher can be background information about the topic.

    2. Does the thesis statement have a unifying principle?
    -> Yes, you explained well the thesis statement by mentioning three important abilities.

    3. Does each body paragraph include a distinct category?
    -> Yes, your each body paragraph includes each distinct category. First is about the importance of passion and second is about that of being patient and also third is about that of communication skills.

    4. Are the supporting details for each paragraph sufficient?
    -> Yes. You explained the specific reasons of each importance of ability.

    5. Does the conclusion restate the three categories?
    -> Yes but it would much better if you add more supporting idea of three abilities and summarize what you said.

    6. Is there advice, a prediction, or a general statement in the conclusion?
    -> No

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  4. < The Three Abilities that I Possess >

    When I was eight years old, I began to learn English for the first time. It was interesting for me to learn from alphabet to a short word one by one. In addition, when I was a middle school student, I met an English teacher who was really passionate and was energetic. The way she taught English was really fascinating and attractive. I liked her and English alike which led me to study English hard and made me want to have a job which was related to English. Still now, I keep thinking which job I want to have and nowadays, I became interested in researching and developing a book to study foreign language. That is, I want to work in the field of publishing company. If so, which ability can be helpful to work in that field? I think 3 abilities are important: Passion, Patience, and Communication skill.


    First, I think having passion is the most important. Because I think working with passion is more valuable than just working reluctantly. If we don't have any desire to do something, we would not feel any achievement and it is meaningless to work. Likewise, when working, I think the desire, that is having a passionate attitude is the most important ability. In my case, I decided to have a job which is related to publishing book because I thought I could feel the motivation the most when I work in that field.

    Second, being patient is also important. Even though we work what we like, sometimes we feel difficult or don't want to continue. I think we should overcome this step to be successful and with this attitude, we can grow our ability more and more. One of my professors also advised us that we should be patient when we faced the difficulties and called the process “stepping stone”. It meant that when we try to overcome our limits, we can step the stone and can grow up more. I totally agreed what she said and still now I keep in mind that advice.

    Finally, I think communication skill is also necessary when we work together. In my case, I would many chances to work with my colleagues to publish one book. So I thought listening to and respecting other's opinion is inquiring attitudes to do this work. In addition, persuading others in polite way is also needed. To have these attitudes, I think It is better to talk to many people as much as possible.

    I told my 3 abilities I have for my future career: Being passionate, patient and having good communication skill. Of course, these are needed based on my academic skill. So I will make ceaseless efforts to have my dream job and develop other qualities to make myself better before and after I graduate the university.

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