201101245 Park Gyu Oh
Tv, could you do without it?
We all love televisions. Televisions became our part of life, and I mean a big part of our life. So, can I live my life without a television? My answer would be yes. I used to live in a university dormitory and we did not have a single television. It seems little bit cruel. However, it is not so hard living without a television. People say without a television, we can't watch CNN, MBC News, and all those 'current event' reporting programs. Therefore, we will not learn anything about the world and what is going on. However, that is not true. We got internet news articles which can help us anytime and anyplace.
There are lots of entertainments to watch in television. So without a single television in our life would be very boring. However, to be honest, television is a box that makes people stupid, so, in Korean, we would call it a stupid box. Entertainments showed on televisions these days are not very fun neither interesting. All they show to us are an idol star talking, singing, and dancing. I do not get what is so fun about that. I have my own favorite programs too, but even in that case, I can download it by using web-hard.
In conclusion, what is a television in my life? It is a parasitic box that wastes my time. Instead of watching CNN, MBC News, 'Moo Han Do Jeon' (Korean famous entertainment show), and etc, I can go outside and play sports, interact with my friends, have a nice cup of alcohol drink, and all those outside activities. So my answer to the question is 'Yes, TV, I could do without it'.
1.Interesting assertion that you can escape from the realm of television.
ReplyDelete2.TV are not essential and there are better things to do then watching televisions.
3. television is a box that makes people stupid
I think this sentence could pose a fierce debate.
4.'However, it is not so hard living without a television.'
this part confused me because you were talking about your past experience and all the sudden the tense changed.
5.Some of the notions in the essay may sound a little offensive to certain people. You could work on your tone of the essay.
The part of introduction was interesting by using your personal experience.
ReplyDeleteI was also a little bit confused between the introduction part and body pharagraph.
Because in the end of introduction part, your opinion seemed to be positive about the topic.
But in the beginning part of the body paragraph, your opinion turns into negative opinion.
so i think it will be better to make the writing more simple.