TV: Could you do without it?
Since the late 1920s, Television has become essential not only to give us information but also an effective means of communication.
In the early days, it was just fabulous and creative machine in which we can get some social informations and also entertain by watching moving images.
However, during the decades, its social function and role have been much more expanded than we imagine. Nowadays, our lives are closely connected with TV.
It serves as a vehicle for advertising, a source of entertainment, and news.
Furthermore, it is an indispensable main medium for molding public opinions.
Besides, it plays a major role in connecting to the world. People all around the world are no longer distant and isolated from each other. We can get all informations around the world through TV and it also brings most distant countries and the strangest customs right into our room. so it allows us to follow the latest developments in science and politics around the world.
Then someone could say we can also get all informations through newspapers or magazines. However, TV can make us communicate each other.
As a result, TV is one of the most essential thing in life and if we don't watch TV, we would be isolated and be treated as an ignorant twit.
Yu Jin,
ReplyDeleteYou gave a good introduction by mentioning the role of TV, and how it changes over time. From what I understand, your main points are : 1. source of information 2. Molding public opinions 3. Connecting people (correct me if I am wrong). Perhaps by adding examples to your first 2 points would help a lot. For instance: "Molding public opinions." (I am very curious about this statement). What is it about molding public opinions? You may want to do some paragraphing too. You have an argument statement before your conclusion. (Elaborate a little how is magazine not playing a better role than the TV? That will give readers a stronger impression on your essay) Lastly, add some more points to your conclusion. How is it by not watching TV that we will be isolated and treated as an ignorant twit?
*You have piqued my curiosity about a lot of your points. Very interesting essay.
Keep up the good work.
Kayeong Kim's comment to Yujin Park
ReplyDelete1. You explained the reason why we need TV with various reasons, even you emphasized the funtion of TV is getting more important in our life. Though i think we don't need TV anymore, your logical reasons made me think again about my personal opinion.
2. You used conjunction in an appropriate way in academic writing. Those words are decorating your essay.
3. However, if you use paragraph property, it could be helpful to read your essay. I mean, then i could know better the structure of your logic.
Thank you for great essay. :)